View Full Version : For your pleasure...

6th Sep 2002, 10:02
To my own surprise, it appears that I have committed a fanfic.
It is here, for your reading pleasure:

If you read it, and like it - or, especially, strongly dislike it, I would really want to know why. Every piece of advice will be helpful; of course, if you find it unworthy even of a comment, well... it's not like I can do anything about it, can I? (shrugs)

The thing I'd be the most interested in is how you find the Kain and Raziel of this fic: do you think they are more or less like what you think their characters are implied to be in the games, or am I horribly away from their "true" characters... Also, since I still have trouble with my English from time to time: are their speech patterns very different from the ones in the games? Any general suggestions on improvement?


(blushes, goes to hide in a hole because of the shame)

Lady Kreliana
6th Sep 2002, 16:25
I haven't been able to finish (gotta go to class), but chapters 1 and two are great. :)

6th Sep 2002, 20:17
Oooh that was sooo good :)
I intended to have a quick look on the forum and skim through the threads quickly (haven't been here in a while) and became totally engrossed in your story. I love your writing style, and the way you italicized parts of it to portray thoughts and emotions.

Beautifully written

7th Nov 2002, 08:17
Just a quick note:
Revised, reedited, and the most important thing: completed, the fic is now here:


It is really little more than a sightseeing tour of Nosgoth. (And the ending is atrocious, I know that.) If you don't have much time (because the story grew quite... bulky in the meantime), could you please read at least this part?


(Just omit the introduction in italics and overlook several small allusions in the text.)

Seeing as it most closely follows the game, and is the least connected to the story?

(I am now planning my first more serious story, and thinking of the fic for the contest - if it ever happens - and would like to know what I need to change in my style. Thusly, every single piece of advice will be accepted with gratitude.)